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Ungraceful Pleasures by ~dreaming-kawaii-love:icondreaming-kawaii-love:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Family Life > Spoken Word


Not bothering with a glass
She swigs the sticky
                                      sweet
                                                      liquid

from the two litre bottle


it may not be alcohol
but it does the job
                                                       clouds her mind
               

                              ungraceful pleasures
like cherry coke smiles
                                   mixed in with stains on the sheet
                                                                                          a forgotten bottle
another time.....
©2009 ~dreaming-kawaii-love
:icondreaming-kawaii-love:

Author's Comments

I'm not really sure if this makes sence. But I was sat swigging cherry coke remembering last night, and it came to me.

Hope you like it

keldax


critique would be great :)

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:iconharlequinjxd:
~HarlequinJXD Jul 8, 2009, 7:35:31 AM
You love your drinks don't you. ;) :P
Awww, this is amazing... Very, what's the word?...
Solemn? But... in a lovely way...
:icondreaming-kawaii-love:
~dreaming-kawaii-love Jul 8, 2009, 8:31:26 AM
Thankyou :)

I like this piece at the moment. Maybe because as a friend pointed out, you have to read on to find out its not about alcohol.

Got that warm fuzzy feeling from what youve said :) thankyou xx

--
Youll find one day... That black sheep girl aint so beautiful...
:iconharlequinjxd:
~HarlequinJXD Jul 8, 2009, 9:19:16 AM
I knoww, it's soooo different. =D
You ish super duper welcome. xx
:icondreaming-kawaii-love:
~dreaming-kawaii-love Jul 9, 2009, 11:54:50 AM
you ish super duper thanked then ;P

--
Youll find one day... That black sheep girl aint so beautiful...
:icondreaming-kawaii-love:
~dreaming-kawaii-love Jul 10, 2009, 8:54:54 AM
(; good times, good people, good drink (:

--
Youll find one day... That black sheep girl aint so beautiful...
:iconharlequinjxd:
~HarlequinJXD Jul 10, 2009, 9:01:14 AM
OHEMGEE!!! YAAAAAYYY!!! ;P
*DiES [in a good way]*
:icondreaming-kawaii-love:
~dreaming-kawaii-love Jul 10, 2009, 9:39:03 AM
dies from awesome ;P

--
Youll find one day... That black sheep girl aint so beautiful...
:iconharlequinjxd:
~HarlequinJXD Jul 11, 2009, 2:15:02 AM
Yupperz.
Death by awesomeness!!! =D
It's kinda like death by chocolate. XD <3 ;P
:icondreaming-kawaii-love:
~dreaming-kawaii-love Jul 11, 2009, 9:34:27 AM
best way to die ;P

--
Youll find one day... That black sheep girl aint so beautiful...
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